I'm gonna be real, The Force Awakens has a terrible second act and very sloppy editing, but that beginning and ending are STRONG.

I wish they'd given that script just one more pass. They fucked up the break into two real bad.

Like, the editing is so bad. Remember how, in the interrogation scene, Kylo Ren put his helmet down on a pedestal full of ash?

... that isn't in the room? 😑 :blobfrowningbig: 🙄

The problems, to my mind, with the middle build of The Force Awakens? Rey doesn't choose the Millennium Falcon. The break into act 2 should be an active choice. She does choose to leave, and it's okay that it's a best bad choice (leave or die), but that thing where she isn't actively deciding to take the robot back on the Millennium Falcon? She's sort of a passenger through the WHOLE middle build in every regard. And that's a problem.

She can still refuse the call! But "Okay, let's run to the Millennium Falcon, return this robot to the resistance so I can go back home!!" would be SO much more character-driven than getting swept up in everybody else's story. It just kinda fumbles and feels aimless and like a series of events until about the time she picks up the lightsaber.

Which is basically the inciting incident to the break into act 3, because then she runs into the forest (a choice) and *chooses* to try and shoot Kylo.


But everything from bumbling onto the Millennium Falcon until roughly act 3 is pretty formless. It's okay, but compared to that opening? WHEW, it's a step down. They coulda kept that momentum with just that tweak (and a lot of tweaks to subsequent scenes as a result).

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